第一百六十五条　……但该物与他物分离使标的物的价值显受损害的， 当事人可以就数物解除合同。
　　Article 165　 …However, if its separation from other items will damage the object value obviously, the parties may rescind the contract with respect to such several items.　　　　(斜体部分应为several such items)
　　第二百九十六条　……超过限量携带行李的，应当办理托运手续。
　　Article 296　…A passenger takes luggage exceeding the limit shall check in the luggage.　　　 （斜体部分应为从句或分词结构）
　 （六）介词运用不当。
　　第一百九十九条　订立借款合同，借款人应当按照贷款人的要求提供与借款有关的业务活动和财务状况的真实情况。
　　Article 199　In concluding a loan contract , the borrower shall provide with the truthful information about the business activities and financial conditions relating　to the loan according to the requirements of the lender.　(with多余，删去)
　　第一百四十一条　出卖人应当按照约定的地点交付标的物。
　　Article 141　The seller shall deliver the object according to the agreed place. （according to应为to）
　 （七）过分拘泥原文，舍简求繁，译文拖沓甚至导致死译、硬译。
　　第一百二十八条 当事人可以通过和解或者调解解决合同争议。……
　　Article 128　The parties may settle their disputes relevant to the contract through conciliation or mediation…　　（斜体部分建议改为contractual disputes）
　　第九十六条　……法律、行政法规规定解除合同应当办理批准、登记等手续的，依照其规定。
　　Article 96　…Where the laws or administrative regulations stipulate that the rescinding of a contract shall go through the formalities of approval and registration,　　the provisions there of shall be followed.　　
　　建议改译： Article 96　…The rescission of contracts shall be subject to official approval or registration if laws or administrative regulations have so stipulated.
　　（八）被动语态的滥用。
　　第三百二十五条　技术合同价款、报酬或者使用费的支付方式由当事人约定，可以采取一次总算、一次总付或者一次总算、分期支付，也可以采取提成支付或者提成支付加预付入门费的方式。
　　Article 325　The method of payment of price, remuneration or royalties in the technology contract shall be agreed upon by the parties. The parties may agree on the method of an overall calculation and one time payment, or of an overall calculation and payment by installment. They may also agree on the method of proportionate payment or such payment plus an advance payment of entrance fee.

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